Orc vs. Dwarf

[Goreth]

‘You lit’le rottin piece of meat!’ Exclaimed the Orc.
‘I wanna grind your bones, cut your neck so you won’t breve no more.’ He was pointing at a little dwarf, hung up against a stone wall, strung up like an animal. The dwarf dares to speak back,

‘ Orc! If only I had a chance to let myself free, I’d stick my axe right through your flesh and before you even think about rising back up, you‘d be dead.’ the dwarf spoke with anger.

‘If only you ad a chance dwarf. In a minit I’m gonna let my spear run through your gut. I don’t want no more chat from lit’le dwarves.’ The orc grabbed his twin bladed spear, sharp rim along each side.

‘See dis beauty? Soon it’s gonna be runnin along your neck and your gonna be howlin like da rest of your ancestors out on dat tree.’
The orc, covered in necklaces of bone, metal plate and marrow horns, swung his spear back behind his head. He grasped and flung forward, aiming for the dwarf’s head. ‘No!’ The dwarf shouted.

The spear missed the dwarfs head and smashed a chain holding his left hand against the wall. The dwarf reached for his axe, foolishly planted next to him, and flung his axe helplessly at the orc who was still latched forward holding his spear.
The orc darted back into reality, and with his might, pulled himself back from the dwarf. ‘Stinkin meat! Stinkin rottin meat! I’m gonna eat you for breakfast!’

The dwarf realising his fate, smashed the chain holding his right hand with his axe, releasing his upper body.
As the Orc came down with another blow, the dwarf threw his body forward and his axe dropped. The spear cracked into the wall behind and stuck in.
The dwarf beckoned for help from others, with his voice was hoarse and thirsty for air.

‘DWARF! COME ERE!’ the orc muttered loudly.
He ordered the orcs to block the tent entrance. The dwarf looked behind as the orc, with glinting eyes of hatred, hung low and back hunched, sprinted for the dwarf.
The Dwarf used the orc as a lever and swings towards his axe on the floor. Picking it up, he faces the orc.

‘AXE? No match for my spear!’


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Don't know if I've managed to capture the orcs accent very well at all, but I hope it was ok.
What do you all think for my first piece of writing about WAR?

[Rak Twoblades]

Use "stunties" instead of dwarves, and "stunty" instead of dwarf.

Also, break up the orc's speech a bit more. Let me show you an example.

Old:
<<‘You lit’le rottin piece of meat!’ Exclaimed the Orc.
‘I wanna grind your bones, cut your neck so you won’t breve no more.’ He was pointing at a little dwarf, hung up against a stone wall, strung up like an animal. The dwarf dares to speak back,>>

New:
<<"Ya 'lil rottin' piece a' meatz!' Exclaimed the orc.
"I wanna grind yoo'ze bonez an' cut yoo'ze neck so yas wont breeve no morez." He was pointing at a little dwarf, hung up against a stone wall, strung up like an animal. The Dwarf, daring to speak back, looks at the orc and says:>>

Now, I'm not an expert by any means. But I've been rping an orc for the last two weeks or so, I definately have gotten a lot of practice :)

Keep up the good work! I expect to see a dead stunty in the next one!

[Goreth]

Thanks alot for the feedback.

I will do my best to make the orcs speech more racially realistic in the next chapter. That's if i do.

[Grkarshh]

ok htat was about the langush theres a special style also example:
old:
>>‘If only you ad a chance dwarf. In a minit I’m gonna let my spear run through your gut. I don’t want no more chat from lit’le dwarves.

See dis beauty? Soon it’s gonna be runnin along your neck and your gonna be howlin like da rest of your ancestors out on dat tree. >>

the way your wrighting it is a bit humie like heres chances(
new:

>>"If only you ad a chance?ill but diz pointy stick int you before ya blink. Youz boyz not made for chatting youz made for killin!!"

See dis pointy thing? Soon ill gonna cut ya head of and your gonna be howlin out on dat tree like da rest uv ya.>>

never use words like ancestors, a dead dwarf is a throfy noting more so some skulls is not old dwarfs hanging in a three, its acitecture. never use hunor eighter thats very important for an orky one.
besides im sure it's going to bee a good story the start was a bit sort so i didn't really get into it. but keep up the good work

[Krudnuk Boarbasha]

Yeah More or less There are many orcs dierlects though you don't have to use a z instead of an s if your charters speaks that way then okay but it depends on the Orc.

I'm a dwarf player Myself but i've know too many orcs players and belive me it's much more fun than Dwarves IMO.

Plus A spear not a very Orcy weapon Try more like Choppa or Basha (Sword or Club)

And if so Say sumthink like: Ya wot?! You Blasted Stunty, you iz nuttin' compaired ta an Orc what makes ya think ya got any right ta talk ta me! if ya keep it up I might just hav' ta Crump ya One on da 'Ead!